Nowadays I read for fun, so I can overlook things poor editing, messy plots, and subpar writing if the action or drama is high, but, even I have limits of how much nonsense I can swallow. And Smokey pushed me over the ledge.

There were so many issues with this book that made ZERO sense. Where Snake had illogical bits, here, the entire plot was built on misunderstandings and inconsistencies that my brain locked on killing my enjoyment.

I had several grumps…

? The timeline is an absolute mess. At age 18, Olivia finds out she’s pregnant. The next time we see her she is 22 meeting Smokey and April (her daughter) has just turned 1 which would make her have over a 3-year pregnancy. Then we have a 2-year FFWD and she’s four, and it ends with her 5th birthday. Also, they keep repeating that they were separated for 2 years, but we read almost 3 years of time jumps and the kid aged 4 years. It was super confusing, and the kid acted a baby the entire time which was weird.

? Inconsistent tone. This may be a Jac thing, but I really need authors to pick a lane and stick to it. Are they badass bikers or momma boys? Are they smart or stupid… tough or weak? Because these dudes do not learn lessons and are being led around by these manipulative club skanks that aren’t smart or sneaky. I don’t want to give spoilers, so let’s look at Doc, who is supposed to be a surgeon and smart, but is humiliating the “love of his life” because some skank claims she’s pregnant with no proof. And the story about her “miscarriage” was so sus it’s laughable, but he just meekly puts up with it all a wimp. Until someone has the nerve to bully his sister, then he’s going to chop off his hands with an axe for daring to touch her. What? Where’s that angry alpha-ness while dealing with Prue?

?Too many flashbacks. There are TONS of flashbacks mid paragraph that were super repetitive.

?Too many time jumps. The plot jumps numerous times skipping over important parts robbing me of development and feels. He HUMILIATES her—jump 2 years. Her daughter just had surgery and he admits to OW shenanigans—6-month jump. This led to SO MUCH telling and not showing making it hard to form any attachment to the characters.

? Too many dum-dum moments prolonged misunderstanding. There were too many times that the characters failed to act normal people, and the assumptions went on for WAY TOO LONG when a simple logical convo would’ve put everyone on the same page. The reasons and excuses for the prolonged conflict were silly.

? So many illogical bits. Who signs a prenup that says you can’t divorce unless there is infidelity? Why are all these chicks (nurses, travel agent, strippers) acting these dudes are millionaires? Wouldn’t the nurse try landing a doctor? Why does everyone overshare? Her ex is seriously going to tell strangers about lube and tearing… wouldn’t he just say you fucked up I’m gay?

Bottom Line- This was too messy for me. I was bored, I was confused, I was annoyed BUT you bet your ass I’m reading Breaker and Quinn’s
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